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求大神看英语作文!
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求大神看英语作文!
求大神看英语作文!
 

求大神看英语作文!
大错不多,小错几个.computer games 前面没有动词,会被理解为和看电视共用.
nothing was able to change 应为 nothing was able to be changed.
so they tried to made him improve his score.这句不能这么写,你知道to后面得是原型吧.
这句话改成So they tried to make him an improvement on his grade.
ill 用sick代替较好
I suggests这个相信是笔误.
最后那个often放到后面(in order to 前面)改成bla bla bla bla more often的句式
至于润色我就算了,虽早你几年学自认没有到能完美润色英语的水平.但是我觉得总体写的挺好的
如果你是小学生那惊为天人,初中生那是班级尖子,高中的话还凑合,大学生参差不齐就不说了.

倒数第四行 suggest 应该是原型的

是要帮你修改的意思吗?对,错误的麻烦帮我指出来,谢谢啦嗯……第五行,and后面加个play哦哦哦看到了,谢谢,还有别的吗还有,等下啊嗯把educational改成educationprogrames改成programs改:he felt so sad and thought himself was a unlucky boy下一句,but things could't change下一句改成Bec...

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